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Friday 23 March 2018

My name is Andre and I live in a mansion in Mission Bay, with five huge bedrooms and the best kitchen you've ever seen. One day when i was just heading off to the toilet when I heard a big explosion outside and i got scared and looked the door, I saw some steam and didn't think it was too important, so went to the bathroom. Five minutes later i got off the bowl and went outside to see what was happening and then I noticed that it wasn't just smoke any more. I heard explosions and tons of ash and rocks and also a huge amount of smoke. the ash headed right towards me so i shut the doors and my house was covered with ash. After a while the ash cleared up and i saw a huge island in the middle of the water and lava was dripping out from the top of the island and melted everything.


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2 comments:

  1. Hi Andre, here's your point score!
    You correctly used (for 3 points each):
    steam
    ash
    island
    lava
    I liked how you used the word 'tons' to describe the amount of ash.
    You lost a point from not using a capital letter at the start of the sentence "the ash headed right towards me."
    So your total score was 13!
    I would have really enjoyed to read an explanation from you about what was happening under Auckland at that point - how the hotspot under Auckland was causing all the things you described!
    Thanks for sharing your story :)

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  2. Hi Andre. Were you scared? I wonder what this smelt like?

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