Friday, 23 March 2018

My name is Andre and I live in a mansion in Mission Bay, with five huge bedrooms and the best kitchen you've ever seen. One day when i was just heading off to the toilet when I heard a big explosion outside and i got scared and looked the door, I saw some steam and didn't think it was too important, so went to the bathroom. Five minutes later i got off the bowl and went outside to see what was happening and then I noticed that it wasn't just smoke any more. I heard explosions and tons of ash and rocks and also a huge amount of smoke. the ash headed right towards me so i shut the doors and my house was covered with ash. After a while the ash cleared up and i saw a huge island in the middle of the water and lava was dripping out from the top of the island and melted everything.

The End


  1. Hi Andre, here's your point score!
    You correctly used (for 3 points each):
    I liked how you used the word 'tons' to describe the amount of ash.
    You lost a point from not using a capital letter at the start of the sentence "the ash headed right towards me."
    So your total score was 13!
    I would have really enjoyed to read an explanation from you about what was happening under Auckland at that point - how the hotspot under Auckland was causing all the things you described!
    Thanks for sharing your story :)

  2. Hi Andre. Were you scared? I wonder what this smelt like?